I think of him
rarely
it’s something
I loathe
to do
a soft breeze
blows
over the pond
and cattails
flicker
mist settles
on the lawn
setting
an eerie stage
for dusk
we want so much
so fast
we forget to give
like stingy children
on a playground
in the arid
desert
showers are
manna
from rain clouds
Venus
when aligned
just right
is the Moon’s
beauty mark
dandelion puff
set free
a thousand
wishes
take flight
mockingbird
showers
in my sprinkler
spreads his wings
to the sun
horses graze
under
fruit tree
bobbing
for apples
*Gogyohka is a new form of Japanese short poetry,
founded and pioneered by Japanese poet Enta Kusakabe.
Gogyohka is pronounced go-gee-yoh-kuh
(the “g”s are hard as in “good”), and literally translated
means “five line poem”. Gogyohka is five lines of free verse
on any subject matter. There is no set syllable pattern,
however the poem should be short and succinct.
The goal is to compellingly capture an idea, observation,
feeling, memory, or experience in just a few words.
Stace,
ReplyDeleteThe images are impressive and most of them are infused with emotions.
In my view, a gogyohka is better treated as a loosely-defined tanka.
of all the gogyohka posted here, my favorite is "dandelion puff." Your use of "a thousand," which is a century-old poetic diction used in waka, makes the poem emotionally effective and evocative.
Just some thoughts.
Chen-ou
And I immensely like the following quote:
ReplyDeleteSometimes the hardest thing and the right thing are the same. ~The Fray
Thanks for sharing.
Chen-ou
Chen, thanks for posting and letting me know your thoughts... it means so much to me. *hx88* stace
ReplyDeleteChen, i had second thoughts, too...
ReplyDeletei like to think of "gogy" that way too...
and the quote you like is my favorite. it is so true. when i have to do what of those "hard" things, i think of this quote for strength, to remind myself that it is also "right" and must be done, no matter how difficult it is. i'm so glad it "spoke" to you... hugs, stace