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Nothing special here. Just a little conglomeration of things that make me happy or that make me grateful...
maybe make me think (a little).



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Monday, September 20, 2010

Gogyohka*

I think of him
rarely
it’s something
I loathe
to do



a soft breeze
blows
over the pond
and cattails
flicker



mist settles
on the lawn
setting
an eerie stage
for dusk



we want so much
so fast
we forget to give
like stingy children
on a playground



in the arid
desert
showers are
manna
from rain clouds



Venus
when aligned
just right
is the Moon’s
beauty mark



dandelion puff
set free
a thousand
wishes
take flight



mockingbird
showers
in my sprinkler
spreads his wings
to the sun



horses graze
under
fruit tree
bobbing

for apples

*Gogyohka is a new form of Japanese short poetry,
founded and pioneered by Japanese poet Enta Kusakabe.
Gogyohka is pronounced go-gee-yoh-kuh
(the “g”s are hard as in “good”), and literally translated
means “five line poem”. Gogyohka is five lines of free verse
on any subject matter. There is no set syllable pattern,
however the poem should be short and succinct.
The goal is to compellingly capture an idea, observation,
feeling, memory, or experience in just a few words.

4 comments:

  1. Stace,

    The images are impressive and most of them are infused with emotions.

    In my view, a gogyohka is better treated as a loosely-defined tanka.

    of all the gogyohka posted here, my favorite is "dandelion puff." Your use of "a thousand," which is a century-old poetic diction used in waka, makes the poem emotionally effective and evocative.

    Just some thoughts.

    Chen-ou

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  2. And I immensely like the following quote:

    Sometimes the hardest thing and the right thing are the same. ~The Fray

    Thanks for sharing.


    Chen-ou

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  3. Chen, thanks for posting and letting me know your thoughts... it means so much to me. *hx88* stace

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  4. Chen, i had second thoughts, too...

    i like to think of "gogy" that way too...

    and the quote you like is my favorite. it is so true. when i have to do what of those "hard" things, i think of this quote for strength, to remind myself that it is also "right" and must be done, no matter how difficult it is. i'm so glad it "spoke" to you... hugs, stace

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